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In A Lupin State Of Mind http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1396253 Current Status of Fic: REMOVED
Before you read this, I need to point out there are MAJOR book 5 spoilers in here. So major that it will really wound your book reading experience. You have been warned. Additionally, posting such horrible spoilers in your SUMMARY is just tasteless and stupid. That being said, this fic deserves what it is about to get. The Fiction
It wasn't fair. Well obviously it wasn't fair, Remus Lupin told himself. Was it ever fair when someone died? No, no it wasn't. He should deal with it. He wasn't the only one that had to cope with the pain of Sirius' death.
Still, it seemed as if everyone he'd ever cared about had been taken away. Most of it had happened all at once. When he was a young boy in Hogwarts, he had the best friends a guy could ask for. Friends that even became illegal Animagi for him.
He'd lost Prongs first. James and his wife, Lily. Both of them killed by Lord Voldemort. That had been a shocking time for him. Everything had seemed like it was going so well, sure people had died, but they were just names without faces, no one that Lupin actually knew. This had been the ultimate slap in the face- two of his closest friends, dead.
Of course, it got worse. As soon as he heard the Potters were dead, a gnawing fear started to grow inside him. He knew the only way the Potters could have died was if their Secret Keeper, Sirius Black, had told Voldemort were they were.
Sirius had been their best friend, he just couldn't bring himself to believe that Sirius had done it. It couldn't have been possible. Yet when Dumbledore questioned him, he came to see it was the only explanation.
"Remus, I know this is hard for you, but please tell me... are you positive Black was the Potters' Secret Keeper?"
Lupin gulped and tried to keep back the tears, but answered as calmly as he could, "That is what I was told. I don't see how it could have been any other way."
Lupin's whole life had suddenly been thrown into a pit of despair. His whole life had existed only as someone to be questioned, one of the Potters' closest friends. Lupin and other Aurors were now on the look out to arrest Sirius Black- but it was Peter Pettigrew who got to him first.
The fourth member of Lupin's childhood friends, Peter Pettigrew (Wormtail) had always been known to be not as smart as the other Marauders. As the story had been told to Remus, Wormtail had cornered Black about James and Lily's death. Furiously Black had whipped out his wand and eliminated Pettigrew, as well as twelve other muggles standing by.
For days and days Remus lay in bed, twisting and turning but hardly ever sleeping. He kept hoping he would wake up and it would have all been some horrible dream. James, Lily, and Peter all dead, all killed by none other than his best friend Sirius Black, who was now in Azkaban.
The only thing that brought him to his senses was the thought of young Harry Potter. This child had miraculously ended Voldemort's reign of power, yet no one knew how. Remus had started to write to Dumbledore, telling him the child could live with him if he wanted, when he stopped in midsentence. He would have to be crazy to send a young child to live with a Werewolf.
It took a year for Lupin to get back to normal, but finally he was. He considered Sirius dead to him, and tried never to think about him. Sometimes he would remember times he spent with James and Lily, but the memories were so painful.
Lupin's life was hard- no one wanted to hire a Werewolf. Finally, twelve years later, Dumbledore offered him a job as Defense Against The Dark Arts teacher at Hogwarts. Thrilled to be able to do something, he accepted.
It was September First on the Hogwarts Express, and just before they arrived at Hogwarts he met Harry Potter. He instantly knew who he was, because he looked exactly like James, only with Lily's eyes. The first few times he spoke with Harry the pain was great, because he reminded him so much of the friends he had lost.
As the year continued Remus spent lots of time with Harry, and it was almost like having James back again. Then at the end of that year they discovered things Remus never dreamed possible. Peter Pettigrew was still alive, and Sirius was innocent. Lupin had embraced Sirius, this man that was like a brother to him and he'd thought of him dead for twelve years.
Even though Sirius had to go into hiding times were still better for Lupin, he talked to Sirius and they became as good friends as they had been in their Hogwarts days. It was amazing, like Sirius had died and come back to life.
And now... now Lupin had lost him again. There would be no coming back to life this time, he had seen him die. It was bad enough he had to be lost to him once, but now he was gone forever.
Times were hard... Lupin could hardly see what the point of living anymore was. There would be plenty more deaths, and he himself might possibly be included. All his friends were dead, what was the point? He might as well end his life now...
"The boy needs you, Remus."
Shocked, Lupin looked up. "Dumbledore! I hadn't known you were there."
Dumbledore looked at him and said, "Remus, Harry needs you. Don't forget about him. You think you've been hurt, well look at him. You're one of the few people he has left."
"You're... you're right, of course," said Lupin, a little ashamed that Dumbledore seemed to know what he was thinking. And when Lupin looked up again, Dumbledore was gone.
He was right, Harry needed him. Yet Sirius' death still hurt so much...
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Author removed this fic.
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